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Complaints to a higher order...

Sun Nov 7, 2004, 6:28 PM
Yay, someone read my journal entries! I am not feeling very thoughtful right now, for I am slowly fighting off a demonic virus that is slowly draining my life-force until I am nothing left but a shell of a man... or woman, rather. My mind feels like it is underwater, listening to the world throughs ears that hear in levels of pain, and the tip of my spine aches, shooting pains all throughout my skull. Everything is more sensitive, though I have to guess with smell, as my nose is so clogged up. I dropped cold water on my hand, and it actually hurt, like I was burned. I hear that thu feel exactly alike, severe burns and severe cold. I would believe it. However, all this... sensitivity comes to me through receptors that feel half clogged, that distort everything in a mind that is only half aware of the world as it is. What to do, what to do? I sleep for hours, take asprin and vitamin C, and hope I can make it to school tomorrow, because I have a test Tuesday in Calculus. And the world spins, and I fall into unknowing...

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:iconhallowspacegirl:
I hope you feel better soon :( Hey, I welcome a full critique - if youde like to mail me with your opinion, please feel free (no worries, Im open and not about to bite heads off) :rose:

Again, I hope you feel better soon, being sick sucks.
:iconscazrelet:
Awwe, thanks for the condolences. Sure I'll do you a crit, haven't done one in awhile ::cracks fingers:: Do mind, especially for work like yours, I will have to be entirely assinine in coming up with things wrong with it, lol. But hey, you asked for it, neh? Just tell me which pic you'd like me to critique, and I shall get to it when I can. (No one ever said I'd be quick about it... so busy I am)

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Critiques-
~I may not be a master, but I know quite a bit
So send me a note if you want a full crit!~
:iconhallowspacegirl:
You can critique Put Em Up or Purrr. Probably Purrr - thanks *smiles*. Don't worry I welcome critism, I feel it helps me to become better at what I want to be the best I can be in. Thanks again - :rose:
:iconscazrelet:
Sorry for the late response on this, I have been so busy...

Purr... Well, it will hard to do a critique of this, as it is such a well done picture, so I will have to resort to awful critical nitpicking! You asked for it...

Lets see, a few things I notice offhand... her lace glove has a seam running from it, going up her arm, but it just tapers into nothingness. What is holding it there? I see, if I look very close, a faint line, but it could be made a slight bit darker. Certain items, such as her mask, and the ribbons, seem to be completely 2-D and have no thickness. The mask seems just lines drawn on her face, for instance. Plus, are the ribbons not supposed to cast shadows? Her hair... all around the outside it is so frayed and messy messy (though I like it like that, mind) but the inside, so completely curled without a strand out of place? Unlikely. The shading in the area beneath her thigh, especially where it merges with her arms, is vague. Her right (ours) eye seems off compared to the other (just a bit). You completely loose the line of her back as it goes into her hair, its a tad confusing. And I am running out of things here... >_< I knew this would be hard!

Anyway, I know some of these might have to do with your reference, I would not know, and frankly, I think it is simply a gorgeous pic, and none of these problems are enough to deter from that. Keep up the good work! If you have questions or comments, or more critiquing, go ahead and send me a note, kk?

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What to put in the blank box beneath my name? A signature? Well I'll be.

Critiques-
~I may not be a master, but I know quite a bit
So send me a note if you want a full crit!~
:iconhallowspacegirl:
Thank you much! yes, I was noticing some of the things you mentioned as well. The line on her arm was done perposely, perhaps in a painting it would make more sense as the gloves would be a different color fading into the skin. The eye, yes I noticed that too. Hehe. The knee is what gets me. The good thing is that you were honest and confirmed some of what I was feeling. This will only make my work better. Thank you again! *smiles* :rose:
:iconscazrelet:
You're plenty welcome!

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What to put in the blank box beneath my name? A signature? Well I'll be.

Critiques-
~I may not be a master, but I know quite a bit
So send me a note if you want a full crit!~

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